Chris Watling1. 1. Departments of Clinical Neurological Sciences and Oncology, Schulich School of Medicine and Dentistry, Western University, London, ON, Canada. chris.watling@schulich.uwo.ca.
In the writer’s craft section we offer simple tips to improve your
writing in one of three areas: Energy, Clarity and Persuasiveness. Each entry focuses
on a key writing feature or strategy, illustrates how it commonly goes wrong, teaches
the grammatical underpinnings necessary to understand it and offers suggestions to
wield it effectively. We encourage readers to share comments on or suggestions for
this section on Twitter, using the hashtag: #how’syourwriting?Exploiting opportunities to create parallel structure is a surefire
technique to improve your writing. Parallel structure simply means that ideas that are
similar in content or function are expressed in a similar way [1]. To present a pair or a series of ideas using
parallel structure, each idea should be written in a similar grammatical and stylistic
form. Parallel constructions—within sentences or paragraphs—guide readers elegantly
through your story. When we use parallel constructions, we show our readers how our ideas are linked, rather than forcing them to
work to see the connections.Orators have long understood the power of parallel structure.
Consider this paragraph from Martin Luther King Jr.’s ‘I have a dream’ speech:Now is the time to make real the promises of democracy. Now is
the time to rise from the dark and desolate valley of segregation to the sunlit
path of racial justice. Now is the time to lift our nation from the quicksands of
racial injustice to the solid rock of brotherhood. Now is the time to make justice
a reality for all of God's children. [2]This iconic speech stands not only as a masterpiece of oratory, but
also as a masterpiece of parallel construction. The paragraph itself is a parallel
construction, with its four sentences each leading off with the invocation ‘Now is the
time.’ And within each of the two middle sentences, evocative contrasts are presented
in parallel form.Using parallel structure effectively is not the sole purview of
master orators, however. Once you know where to look for opportunities, you can use
parallel structure to enliven your own writing. Within sentences, there are two key
opportunities. First, look for situations where you enumerate a series of ideas, and
then ensure that each item in the series is similarly constructed. A series might
comprise short phrases separated by commas or semicolons, or even set off by numbers.
Let’s consider an example:Faculty members juggled a number of competing
responsibilities, including to provide feedback, assessment of learners, and
developing curricula.In this series, the three competing responsibilities are expressed
in three different ways: as an infinitive (‘to provide’), as a noun (‘assessment’),
and as a gerund (‘developing’). The effect of this verbal eclecticism is that the
writing loses momentum, and the reader gets stuck mid-sentence. If each idea were
expressed in a similar fashion, the sentence would flow much more easily:Faculty members juggled a number of competing
responsibilities, including providing feedback, assessing learners, and developing
curricula.Here each task is expressed as a gerund (an ‘-ing’ verb used as a
noun), but there is more than one way to bring parallel structure to this sentence.
Each task could also be expressed as a noun:Faculty members juggled a number of competing
responsibilities, including feedback provision, learner assessment, and curriculum
development.The key is to be consistent within a series.Second, look for opportunities to use joining words to link two
ideas within the same sentence. Commonly used joining words include:Not only…but alsoBoth…andEither…orNeither…norThe trick to making joining words work for you is to ensure that
the words that follow the first word or phrase are similar in form to those that
follow the second [3]:Stroke units not only reduce
mortality, but also improve functional
outcomes.In this sentence, the word that follows not
only (‘reduce’) is the same form—a present tense verb—as the word that
follows but also (‘improve’), which not only
creates a pleasing symmetry, but also reinforces the connection between the two
ideas.Just as parallel structure strengthens sentences, so it breathes
life into paragraphs. As key building blocks of any manuscript, paragraphs elaborate
ideas, advance logic, and build arguments. Consider the following short paragraph
about the state of the science on feedback:Considerable attention has been paid to the structural aspects
of feedback, leading to articles and workshops aimed at educating feedback
providers about how to construct and deploy feedback effectively. The issue of
learners’ responses to feedback has received less attention, although a growing
body of literature has been exploring this area. We have not undertaken a critical
examination of medicine’s learning culture and how it might enable or constrain
the exchange of meaningful feedback.The paragraph is grammatically correct, but lacks punch and style.
The solution? Create a parallel structure to link the paragraph’s three central
ideas:We have paid considerable attention to the
structural aspects of feedback, leading to articles and workshops aimed at
educating feedback providers about how to construct and deploy feedback
effectively. We have devoted less attention to
learners’ responses to feedback, although a growing body of literature has been
exploring this area. And we have virtually
ignored medicine’s learning culture and how it might enable or
constrain the exchange of meaningful feedback.Of course, one rarely uses a single writing technique to solve a
style problem. Here, I have also used active rather than passive verb constructions
for the first two ideas, and I have strengthened the third verb phrase from ‘we have
not undertaken’ to ‘we have virtually ignored.’Next time you are editing your own work, challenge yourself to
create parallel constructions wherever possible. The result will be stronger, clearer,
and more persuasive prose.
Authors: Teresa M Chan; Jaime Jordan; Samuel O Clarke; Luan Lawson; Wendy C Coates; Lalena M Yarris; Sally A Santen; Michael Gottlieb Journal: AEM Educ Train Date: 2022-02-01